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Old 01-21-2008, 06:56 PM   #1
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Default Aizawa Shipori - Child of the Naga

Spent 6 AP and 2 GMAP (courtesy Sound GMs)

Name: Aizawa Shipori
Age: 42
Sex: Male
Height: 5'4"

Character Type: Shinobi

Country/Village: Old Sound Village
Rank: Senshi-level / Officially Chuunin
Division: Missing-Nin

Physical Description: Shipori rarely looks his age, instead using the powers of his seal to appear as a child in his early teens. The seal itself appears as a tattoo of the characters 'Eternal Bloom' etched into his flesh in heavy black ink. To compound his semi-frozen aging, Shipori looks underdeveloped, being both short and scrawny, barely hinting at his shinobi training. His skin is pale, once almost deathly, but now starting to warm from the sun of Iron Country. Shipori's eyes are a little large with heavy lids, always sinking down over the rest of his eyes. His irises are red in color, mirroring the limited pigmentation of his skin. Shipori's hair is shaggy and sweeps out, colored a light blue-gray and dull as dust.

Shipori bears a highly fragile look as though not human at all, but more like a doll walking off its shelf. His movements are smooth and precise, but weak and delicate. When walking, he has a marked limp that all but prevents him from moving faster than a quick shuffle. Normally, Shipori's expressions are flat, more lifelike than truly lively. However, when pushed, Shipori is a master of the haughty smile.

Clothing: Being a senshi of old ways, Shipori very much dresses in the past, preferring the familiar over anything else. He wears a semi-ornate kimono seeming ill-suited to the life of a shinobi. In actuality, Shipori finds it comfortable and has had it tailored so the billowing cloth does not hamper his movements when he needs to be quick. The innermost layer is flat black with a red trim, passing left over right and tied off with a sash. Over this base is a wide, open coat of deep, dark gray, stitched with long, flowing swirls that run down the length of the piece. Shipori's legs are kept in matching, slightly billowed pants that run down to his shinobi sandals, black in color.

Of particular note are the touches that make Shipori seem almost priest-like. Worn on the right is a yellow, beaded construct that serves as a hairpiece. Three large wooden beads are fastened to him and then attached to thinner pieces that hang down and jut out in carefully organized way. A similar, smaller collection serves as an earring suspended from his left ear. Various necklaces and rings of the yellow beads are wrapped around his outfit and he bears a heavy cord belt that loops about him and keeps his coat from fluttering off his body. All of Shipori's clothing gives him the look of a shambling mound, a tiny body within a thick shell of silk.

Personality: The touch of the Naga is obvious on Shipori, but not in the usual way. While others have been changed by the Naga, Shipori became one himself, molded to be both scientist and experiment. Thus, even after rejecting the Naga as his allies, Shipori acts a great like his former caretakers and compatriots. When he speaks, his words are carefully chosen and laid out exactly as he intends, often littered with formality and higher diction. Shipori is a brainy type, full of impressive ideas while maintaining enough perspective to see his own limits. He relies heavily on strategy and planning rather than action and prefers to know absolutely everything about a given situation before deciding on his perfect course.

This tendency towards inaction conflicts with the shinobi lifestyle, however. When faced with a snap decision, Shipori struggles, almost straight-jacketed by his obsession with detail. His analysis can be ploddingly slow and forcing it causes him immense stress. When proven wrong or out of his depth, Shipori is easily agitated and frustrated. Though typically calm and serene, Shipori's temper, when it goes off, is typified by violence.

What truly separates Shipori from even the Naga is his sense of timelessness. His seal is reassuring; he will not die of aging for a long while and he will never have to feel old. It is his seal which causes Shipori to act with such deliberation and drag out his plans – his whole existence is stretched. He has little interested in the mundane, believing he'll outlive it, and by hoarding knowledge and skill, Shipori attempts to fulfill his 'purpose' as a living deity. Shipori's god complex is both intense and central to everything he is.

Nindo; "Way of the Ninja": "Life is all about timing... the unreachable becomes reachable, the unavailable become available, the unattainable... attainable. This is my distinction."

Clan/Bloodline: None

Combo Archetype: Bookworm
Archetypes: Ninjutsu Specialist – Genjutsu Specialist
Combo Special: You may spend up to two rather than one thread points on jutsu. The second point spent on jutsu must always be a Genjutsu or Ninjutsu.

Primary Archetype: Ninjutsu Specialist
Primary: Chakra
Secondary: Own Choice
Tertiary: Own Choice
Stat Merit: +2 to Power, +1 to Control
Stat Flaw: -2 to Strength, -1 to Tactics

Secondary Archetype: Genjutsu Specialist
Stat Merit: +2 to Willpower, +1 to Intelligence
Stat Flaw: -2 to Strength, -1 to Stamina


Physical - Tertiary

Strength: 1 - 2 (NS) - 2 (GS) + 13 = 10
Speed: 1 + 15 = 16
Stamina: 1 - 1 (GS) + 12 = 12

Mental - Secondary

Intelligence: 1 + 1 (GS) + 16 + 3 (Thread) + 3 AP = 24
Tactics: 1 - 1 (NS) + 18 + 3 (Thread) + 3 AP = 24
Willpower: 1 + 2 (GS) + 16 + 2 (Thread) + 3 AP = 24

Chakra - Primary

Power:1 + 2 (NS) + 20 + 4 (Thread) + 3 AP = 30
Control: 1 + 1 (NS) + 20 + 4 (Thread) + 3 AP = 30
Reserves: 1 + 20 + 3 (Thread) + 3 AP = 27

Jutsus and Techniques

Sound Genjutsu and Lost Music
[F1] - Okuyuki Katawa (Control 3, Intelligence 2)
[F2] - Mimiuchi no Jutsu (Reserves 6, Control 6, Intelligence 4)
[F3] - Genjutsu Kai [Replacing: Jouho no Koe] (Intelligence 9, Tactics 9, Control 7)
[F4] - Lost Music: Tremolo [Replacing: Itai Kanetsuki no Jutsu] (Reserves 12, Control 11, Power 10, Intelligence 12)
[F5] - Lost Music: Silencio [Replacing: Kurayami no Oii] (Reserves 18, Control 17, Power 17, Tactics 14)
[F6] - Lost Music: Morendo [Replacing: Sameru] (Reserves 21, Control 20, Power 19, Intelligence 17, Tactics 15)
[GMAP] - Shikyo Kanshihon [Replacing: Shibirekan] (Reserves 23, Control 23, Power 22, Tactics 16, Willpower 15)

Sound Ninjutsu
[A1] - Myaku (Control 3, Tactics 2)
[F7] - Kaze Senbon no Jutsu (Myaku, Control 5, Reserves 4, Power 4)
[F8] - Kaze no Sen (Kaze Senbon no Jutsu, Control 9, Reserves 9, Intelligence 7)
[F9] - Kaze no Yari (Kaze no Sen, Control 14, Reserves 13, Power 11, Willpower 10)
[F10] - Kaze no Ransu (Kaze no Yari, Control 18, Reserves 17, Power 17, Willpower 14)
[Thread] - Jishinha (Control 23, Reserves 23, Power 22, Willpower 16, Tactics 15)
[Thread] - Onchou: Chikara (Control 26, Reserves 25, Power 24, Intelligence 19, Willpower 17)

Ribbon Ninjutsu
[F11] - Basic Ribbon Control (Power 2, Willpower 2)
[F12] - Ribbon Blade (Control 3, Intelligence 2)
[F13] - Ribbon Extension (Power 5, Control 4, Reserves 4)
[F14] - Subterranean Ribbon (Intelligence 8, Willpower 6, Tactics 8 )
[AP1] - Drilling Ribboni (Power 14, Control 13, Reserves 11, Willpower 10)
[AP2] - Grand Ribbon Control (Power 17, Control 16, Reserves 16, Intelligence 15)
[Thread] - Flechette (Power 23, Control 23, Reserves 22, Willpower 16, Tactics 15)

Sumi Ninjutsu
[AP3] - Hake no Jutsu (Power 3, Intelligence 2)
[AP4] - Sumi Sansaku no Jutsu (Control 2, Tactics 2)
[AP5] - Bijusuteki Sumi Henge no Jutsu (Control 6, Power 6, Intelligence 4)
[GM1] - Chouju Giga no Jutsu – Nii (Control 8, Power 8, Reserves 6)
[GM2] - Sumi Daho no Jutsu (Intelligence 12, Tactics 11, Willpower 10, Control 12)
[Thread] - Chouju Giga no Jutsu – Shi (Control 17, Power 16, Reserves 16, Intelligence 15)
[Thread] - Hichou Sumi no Jutsu (Control 23, Power 23, Reserves 22, Tactics 16, Willpower 15)
[Thread] - Kinyuu Honsho [Replacing: Open Slot] (Intelligence 3, Reserves 3)
[Thread] - Maruhi Ga [Replacing: Open Slot] (Intelligence 6, Tactics 5, Power 5)
[Thread] - Chouju Giga no Jutsu – Go (Control 21, Power 20, Reserves 19, Intelligence 17, Tactics 15)
[Thread] - Gen’ei Giga no Jutsu (Intelligence 21, Tactics 20, Willpower 19, Control 17, Power 15)

Eternal Bloom Seal
[AP6] - Eternal Bloom
[X] - Eternal Bloom - Second Level
[Thread] - Body Control (Control 5, Power 4, Reserves 4)

Global Ninjutsu and Lost Music
[A2] - Kawarimi no Jutsu (Power 2, Tactics 2)
[A3] - Kinobori no Jutsu (Power 5, Control 4, Reserves 4)
[A4] - Lost Music: Virtuoso [Replacing: Open Slot] (Intelligence 10, Tactics 10, Control 8)
[Thread] - Kisousei Ninpou Kawara Shuriken (Intelligence 14, Tactics 13, Willpower 11, Control 10)
[Thread] - Kage Bunshin no Jutsu (Power 21, Control 20, Reserves 19, Intelligence 17, Tactics 15)
[Revamp] - Shuriken Kage Bunshin no Jutsu (Power 23, Control 23, Reserves 22, Tactics 16, Willpower 15)
[Thread] - Rasengan (Power 19, Control 19, Reserves 18, Intelligence 16)
[Thread] - Fuuja Houin (Intelligence 21, Tactics 20, Willpower 19, Power 17, Control 15)
[Thread] - Shunshin no Jutsu (Power 12, Control 11, Reserves 10, Intelligence 12)
[Thread] - Bakuretsu Kage Bunshin no Jutsu (Power 30, Control 27, Reserves 26, Intelligence 22, Tactics 20)

Chakra Poisoning
[Thread] - Infliction I (Control 12, Reserves 11, Power 10, Willpower 12)
[Donate] - Sweet Blood (Control 14, Reserves 13, Power 11, Tactics 10)
[Donate] - Temporary Immunity (Control 15, Reserves 15, Power 13, Willpower 14)
[Thread] - Infliction II (Control 17, Reserves 16, Power 16, Willpower 15)
[Thread] - Blood Contagion (Control 18, Reserves 17, Power 17, Tactics 14)
[MotM] - Temporary Immunity (Control 19, Reserves 19, Power 18, Willpower 16)
[Thread] - Infliction III (Control 21, Reserves 20, Power 19, Willpower 17, Tactics 15)

Kami-Hen (Hidden Returning Small Blade inside a tome) - 4
Breathing Apparatus - 1
Zoom Goggles - 1
Night Vision Goggles - 2
Hallucinogenic Poison - 2
Debilitating Poison - 3

Weapon Points Remaining: 1
Additional Weapon Points Gained: 6 (3 AP)


Aizawa Shipori, born twenty-two years ago in Otogakure. At least, I believe it has been twenty-two years since my birth, when I was delivered to Aizawa Maki and her husband Hachiro. I was the first, the only, for it became apparent that my mother was unlikely to bear more children. The doctors pronounced it miraculous that her infertility had created even me and no matter how much my parents tried (and they did try) there was never another pregnancy. I know they were disheartened, but they eventually accepted this fate and I became their spoiled only child, or as spoiled as possible.

We were not a well-off family, but few were at that time. Sound is a difficult place to live in; despite technology there is still a lack of wealth to go around. I blame competition from the other, larger villages who are able to handle the majority of job requests with relative ease and have the funds to charge less for doing so. Comparatively, money comes to Sound in bursts when a rejected, underhanded mission is thrown our way and we manage to succeed. However, despite both my parents efforts to support the three of us, as I reached childhood it became increasingly difficult.

My father was injured on a mission, suffered something horrible that left him bed ridden for months. His right leg had been shattered from hip to ankle and medics were reluctant to operate. The village gave out medical treatment, of course, but we could not make up our end of the bargain right away. An installment plan was set up and my mother continued to work as my father healed, but his injury had doomed us. Between food, rent, and piling hospital bills, our family sunk into debt in a matter of months. I only knew that times were hard, not that we were bankrupt.

When they came, I didn't understand that either, but now I know. The Naga were always looking for more subjects for their various experiments, usually looking for prisoners for their twisted tests. However, I've heard that when they were reasonably sure that an experiment would not kill someone, they went rooting through the lower class slums for appropriate bodies. They approached my mother knowing our family was a few weeks from utter collapse and gave her a proposal, one I've long since given up being angry over.

All of them knew that she had limited options. If she gave me to them, the family would be alive, albeit separated. She was able to support herself and the Naga had promised to keep me in top condition and comfort. Otherwise, she could refuse and watch as the two of us starved to death in a gutter. I know the choice pained her and I've forgiven her; she relinquished her rights to me, giving me up to the Naga in the hope that I would arrive on the other side healthy. Shortly, I was taken and have not seen her or my father since.

The Naga themselves are not so bad. While a lot of them are recognizably insane, they tend to keep to themselves and only come together to work on various projects. They are dedicated scientists with a certain level of depravity, but I was more or less exempt from the kind of abuse they gave the prisoners and criminals down in the labs. I am not entirely sure why they stayed true to their word of taking good care of me, but I am thankful for it. I was nervous and scared for awhile after I was legally abandoned and adopted, yet I eventually settle in to life with the Naga.

Confined to the lab complex, I became a sort of servant to the Naga, trailing after them wherever they would let me go. I think most of them found it ego-inflating to have what amounted to a dog at their heels while some might have legitimately enjoyed having as close to a child as they would ever see. I assisted with research, sometimes, bringing books and tools and carefully walking vials of unknown liquids over to the whatever Naga I was following that day. This came to be my life and as the weeks and months started to become years, I settled into the labs and they became my home.

For the Naga's purposes, I started to be specifically groomed for the tasks I had undertaken on my own. I was more than a quick way to run documents around; I watched as surgeries and dissections were performed so I would be able to help in future procedures. At first, seeing the people they operated on disgusted me as I found the sight of their blood to be horrible, but this sense dulled. I was, as they reminded me, a shinobi by birth, so I had to get used to the idea of blood. I often wonder why the presented such otherwise gruesome sights to me, but I believe I know the answer. While my primary, developing purpose looked to eventually become a Naga, I needed to first learn how to be a shinobi.

It was a precursor, then, to my official training. When I was of age, I was forced out of the Naga compound for the first time in a long while. The air was different and I was displeased at first, however there was little time to consider how I preferred the complex. Not having parents to teach me the basics and with the Naga too busy to do more than give an occasional verbal lesson while they took care of other business, I was quite far behind the other students. We were instructed en masse and it was apparent that I was dead last as far as ability went. The children were as quick to realize this as I was and hell began.

Every night, I would return to the seclusion of the labs and nurse whatever wounds I'd received that day. Often, they were physical, usually due to a taijutsu training session or a ninjutsu experiment gone awry, but psychological trauma was there too. I could handle being last in the class, as the teachers were willing to help when I begged them to; it was bullying that I couldn't take. The Naga sometimes raised their voices to me when I made mistakes or dropped something, but they were hardly mean or cruel to 'their own'. Eventually, tensions came to a breaking point.

I'm not entirely sure what happened. One of the other boys had been on my case all day and I had had enough. A snide comment and a push to the dirt later and I felt something snap. I picked up the kunai I'd been practicing with and I pushed it into his goddamn chest while he was laughing at me. There was blood everywhere and I remember struggling with his friends while he was dying. I pulled the knife from his body and pointed it at another of them, which caused them to immediately scatter and run. Dropping the kunai, I gathered my things and went home to the Naga.

No one said anything about it and I was soon thereafter promoted to a true shinobi. The teachers likely knew what had happened and while I was still lacking in skills, I clearly had the spirit down pat. For my own protection, though, I opted to continue my training primarily in the Naga catacombs. Having basics down meant that one of them could stop by for a little and provide an introductory lesson to a new technique before letting me figure it out for myself. It was a very self-regimented and disciplined way of learning made all the sweeter by the lack of contact with the outside.

However, as I was now property of the Naga and the village, I was called out to perform missions. I was always assigned to temporary teams and I very rarely got along well with any of them. For the most part, I kept to myself and did as I was instructed, which left me more or less ignored by others. When I spoke, it was to the team leaders, usually higher rank than myself and thus older. With them, I felt comfortable, knowing that they were more mature. I suppose I simply couldn't relate to other children who were socialized entirely differently and highly distrustful of those who were considered 'strange'. I got over it, though.

As I worked on my shinobi career, the Naga finished up a project that I'd been providing on again, off again help with. It was called 'Endless Bloom' and they wanted me to be one of the end users. I was hesitant at first, knowing full well that a great deal of what the Naga created did huge amounts of damage to the subjects, but I was assured that the seal was in its completed, perfect form. From the notes I was given, it had been an attempt at immortality that failed, turning into an approximation rather than an absolute. They wanted to give it to me and I knew why. By bearing the seal, willing to bear it even, I was permanently part of the Naga's fold, and that was what I wanted as well.

The process was painful, I know, but pain is quickly forgotten. I awoke after the surgery to find the black symbols emblazoned on my chest and an odd emptiness in my stomach. I wanted to eat something, as that seemed the normal reaction, yet my body refused to be hungry. It was the first encounter with the seal's side effects, which I've learned to deal with since then. Once I was recovered enough to return to daily activities, I was quickly readmitted to the hospital when the true disadvantage to the seal reared its ugly head. I accidentally cut myself during training and nearly bled to death.

Thus, my studies took a different turn. Forsaking weapons and taijutsu as much as possible, wary that I might end up seriously harming myself again, I put my nose to the books. The Naga had an extensive library, mostly of medical knowledge which I had more than a life time to become acquainted with, so finding proper materials wasn't too hard. At any rate, there were always places to find information in Sound itself when I deigned to leave the complex of my own free will. After absorbing more knowledge which came easier to me than the physical training, as well as after completing more tasks for the village, I was promoted officially to chuunin.

Years passed and my routine remained mostly the same, though my employment with the village proper started to slip away. Watching the calender turn but my body stay the same made me aware of how much time I had, how pointless it was to worry about when that next promotion would happen. I sticked to studying in the catacombs with my adoptive family, who seemed a little smug to have me to themselves again. I was forever going to be their pet for a long while and I honestly didn't mind. The Naga cared for me as a child and gave their own kind of support when I needed it. To stay with them was a blessing and not a curse.

In the lapse between that promotion and the present, I've done quite a bit of personal improvement. Sound's style of ninjutsu and genjutsu is, of course, best presented with something to create the necessary element; the sound. I taught myself instruments in between practicing the jutsu themselves. Using the Naga's specialty medical books, I looked at the documented workings of the brain for inspiration. All in all, it was just a continuation of a lifetime of isolation broken only by the Naga, their presence, their few words, their experiments. But knowing it would keep going dreamily, I was happy.

And then they attacked. The other villages bombarded Sound and broke into it, trying to exterminate it, exterminate us. The alarm sounded and at first I was confused, what with the Naga complex being below the village itself. When it became clear what was happening, I was bound to go and fight while the Naga themselves mostly stayed where they were. Truth be told, I wanted to stay safe in the complex where the Naga and I could protect each other, but I did not yet have that privilege. Exiting into the village, I tried to beat back as many of the invaders as possible, just as everyone else was.

The fighting was long and terrible, with more bodies than I had ever seen being piled up. For the most part, I had thankfully avoided injury, being careful not to attack from any place that would invite a counter. As the enemy tried to withdraw after hollowing our village out and reducing it nearly to nothing, I started to pursue them up the tunnels. I was not fast, but I could at least slow them down as comrades arrived to finish the job. The battle was drawing to a close when it happened. The ceiling of the tunnel I was in started to fall apart.

I suppose the damage to the village's structure was too much, especially with the Stone nin using the walls of the city to their advantage. Rocks blocked my path one instant and in the next they were on top of me, pinning me to the ground as I felt the whole tunnel shaking and falling apart behind me. It was suddenly very dark and dusty and I knew that my legs were probably broken from the pieces of ceiling that had landed on them. When everything settled, it became clear that there was at least air flowing in from somewhere so I wouldn't suffocate, but I was far too weak to ever free myself, despite struggling for a long while.

I'm sure they're looking for me though.

Other Info: Shipori's flute is actually an ocarina. The ribbons he controls are wrapped in cloth, as per picture for reference.

Thread Log: Of Rubble and Ruin - +1 Control, Ninpou Kawara Shuriken, Kisousei Ninpou Kawara Shuriken
Winning the Hearts and Minds - Part One - +1 Reserves, Kage Bunshin no Jutsu, Hichou Sumi no Jutsu
Winning the Hearts and Minds - Part Deux - +1 Reserves, Jishinha, Chouju Giga no Jutsu - Shi
Therein Lies the Truth - +1 Intelligence, Kinyuu Honsho, Bakuretsu Ninpou Kawara Shuriken
December - Death Scroll and Secret Moth added with GMAP. 3 AP exchanged for 10 weapon points.
Extending the Hand of Friendship - +1 Control, Body Control, Yuuin no Mai
Black Paper Moon - +2 Intelligence, +1 Willpower
Reckoning: Into the Snake's Pit - +2 Tactics, Chouju Giga no Jutsu – Go, and Gen’ei Giga no Jutsu
Moved to Missing-nin: 3/28/2011
Global Ninjutsu Revamped - Ninpou Kawara Shuriken deleted, replaced with Shuriken Kage Bunshin. Ribbon Jutsu edited to reflect technique name changes.
The Struggle for Power - +3 Power
Hiring Sociopaths - +1 Control, +1 Reserves, Rasengan
Global Ninjutsu Mini Revamp - Exploding Homing Rooftile Shuriken deleted, replaced with Evil Sealing Method.
The Unburied - +1 Control, Shunshin, Onchou: Chikara
Spent 18 AP into Int/Tac/Wil/Pow/Con/Res (7/3/17)
Vision Quest - +1 Power, +1 Control, Exploding Kage Bunshin, Infliction I
Donation Drive Special - Sweet Blood, Temporary Immunity
Past Lives - +1 Tactics, +1 Willpower, Infliction II, Blood Contagion + Temporary Immunity II (MotM - Merdle), Infliction III

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Old 04-01-2008, 04:10 PM   #2
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Moved to registry. Please note that the Lost Music swaps are still in registry and their stage listings are thus approximations.
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Old 04-02-2008, 08:56 AM   #3
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Physical - Tertiary

Strength: 1 - 2 (NS) - 2 (GS) + 14 = 10
Speed: 1 + 14 = 15
Stamina: 1 - 1 (GS) + 12 = 12
Should be 11.
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Old 04-02-2008, 12:40 PM   #4
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Old 04-02-2008, 04:58 PM   #5
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I'll just start by saying that the picture you chose is wonderful. I really don't care if people think they're pointless to have as I tend to disagree. Visual aids are important in my opinion.

Of course, the text is important as well. Regarding that, I am glad to see that all three descriptions are lengthy and detailed, and typed in a slightly alternative style, which is good. Playing a character with this type of personality is never easy, so I'm waiting to see how you pull it off.

The stats, although lacking colour coding, are laid out in an orderly manner and are very easy to recognise. I'm more happy to see you bothered to add the archetypes of the Combo Archetype and saved me the excruciating trouble of looking them up. This is how it's supposed to be done!

I absolutely love how you've laid out the techniques. It's simply wonderful in all its lawfulness. You have also spent the correct amount of item points.

The bio... I rarely read this in detail as I like to think it's a GMs decision whether a character is fitting for his country or not. But since Shipori (fun name, by the way) has Naga relations, I thought I'd read it through. Plus I want to read a story of some kind.
Without going into extensive detail, I found his history interesting and feasible. Instead of being a mutant experiment of the Naga, he mostly was just an assistant who received a seal. Simple as that. It is a good story despite its dangerous Naga cliché and I see no reason why it should get in your way.
Seems like he was really lucky for not getting any cuts when the rocks fell on him. Would have sucked otherwise, hm?

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Old 04-05-2008, 10:07 AM   #6
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Wonderful character, it depicts all which I see as the Naga organization. With everything in check, I deem this character Sound GM approved.

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Old 04-24-2008, 09:37 PM   #7
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All jutsu have been approved, by the way.
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