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Default Kiyomizu Shusui - MOED Hunter-nin

Name: Kiyomizu Shusui
Age: Twenty-one
Sex: Male
Height: 5’7”

Character Type: Shinobi

Country/Village: Kusa no Kuni / Kusagakure no Sato
Rank: Chuunin
Division: Hunter-nin (MOED)

Physical Description and Clothing: Oh, what a difference a few years has made. What replaced a rather lethargic and oft called "skittish" young boy is the bud of a more focused and mature young man. Shusui's body has taken on more of the natural weight that comes with growing healthily to the prime of his life. He is still standing comfortably at a rather standard height of a Kusagakure shinobi and looks equally as sturdy while he continues to grow into the new and more physically demanding role of a Hidden Grass Hunter. The male's more boyish facial features have now also gone the more handsome route, though between members of the Kiyomizu family, he has still predominantly kept more of his mother's features. His hair, previously long is now cut short to frame his face and give him a smarter looking appearance and a thin dusting of facial scruff lines his jaw. The male walks comfortably through the streets of Kusagakure, confidence coming from many of the experiences he has undergone in his young, but still budding career.

Still... though the numbers of articles have increased in numbers, Shusui still keeps them for the most part very simple. Not a flashy person by any means, the male likes to keep his wardrobe pretty neutral. There is still more of a lean towards the various shades and hues of green --- his favorite color since his younger days, but otherwise most of his casual clothing falls upon this line. It certainly doesn't hurt that neutral colors are a staple of Kusagakure no Sato's color scheme and surroundings in the least. His choice of the type of clothing that he prefers wearing has changed a fair bit, though. Now, the Chuunin prefers smart-looking, longer sleeved clothing in a more formal settings such as work.

Personality: With everything that has happened over the last few years, Shusui has changed in many ways. New responsibilities, privledges and expectations have increased his sense of urgency, keeping him much more busy than he had been in the past. Tagging along with this new sense of urgency has come more of an appreciative sense of privacy. Though known for being more contemplative in the past, the added experience from his career has further instilled the "look before you leap" mentality, which colors into all phases of his life. This mindset has closed his applicable social circle by a bit--- he is not the type to go out and party or do some of the things the more "youthful" members are expected to do, but he is very appreciative and protective of those close friends that he has made over the years. Strangers also get a lot of consideration, even if he is not nearly as open. Above all, Shusui believes in harmony.

Even with the all of the new responsibilities that have come into his life of late, Shusui is still as inquisitive as he was when he was a teenager. Surprisingly, there are many opportunities that come up for studying in this field. Watching his coworkers interact, seeing reactions to a chase, finding texts and scrolls to study in order to improve... the Chuunin has many new ways to find enjoyment in the smaller things that he appreciates. Luckily, his more manipulative side has gone off to the way. More content to examine and let things go their natural course rather than to redirect, Shusui has found an overall more enjoyable time of things. There are still a fair amount of uncertainties in his life and the direction that it will bring him, but in seeing how his beliefs and disposition has gotten him so far, the Chuunin is more confident in staying the course and seeing what lies ahead.

Nindo; "Way of the Ninja": “Don’t stress over the things you have no control over.”
Clan/Bloodline: None.
Primary Archetype: Maverick (+1 Intelligence, +1 Tactics, +1 Willpower, -1 Power, -1 Control, -1 Reserves)
Secondary Archetype: Quicksilver (+2 Speed, +1 Stamina, -1 Strength, -1 Power, -1 Control)


Physical – Secondary (27)

Strength: 1 - 1 + 4 (TH) + 3 (AP) + 7 = 14
Speed: 1 + 2 + 10 + 2 (AP) + 2 (TH) = 15 (+16 Ahou no Ojike) 33
Stamina: 1 + 1 + 10 + 1 (TH) = 13 (+20 Ahou no Ojike) 33

Mental – Primary (30)

Intelligence: 1 + 1 + 10 + 3 (AP) + 2 (TH) = 17
Tactics: 1 + 1 + 10 + 3 (AP) + 1 (TH) = 16
Willpower: 1 + 1 + 10 + 3 (AP) + 1 (TH) = 16

Chakra – Tertiary (24)

Power: 1 - 1 - 1 + 4 (TH) + 9 + 3 (AP) = 15
Control: 1 - 1 - 1 + 2 (TH) + 8 = 9
Reserves: 1 - 1 + 1 (TH) + 7 = 8


Strength: Level Two
Speed: Level Five
Stamina: Level Five

Jutsus and Techniques

Global Ninjutsu
[F-1] Kawarimi no Jutsu (Power 2, Tactics 2) [Stage One]
[F-2] Henge no Jutsu (Control 3, Intelligence 2) [Stage One]
[F-3] Kinobori/Kabenobori no Jutsu (Power 5, Control 4, Reserves 4) [Stage Two]
[TP] Fukuwajutsu (Intelligence 9, Tactics 9, Control 7) [Stage Three]
[TP] Kafunkyuuka Shibuku (Intelligence 12, Tactics 11, Willpower 10, Power 12) [Stage Four]
[TP] Eki Haitori no Jutsu (Intelligence 17, Tactics 16, Willpower 16, Power 15) [Stage Five]

Ahou no Ojike
[F-4] Stage One (Speed 6, Stamina 2)
- Regular Techniques: Vital Strike: Ichiban, Battle Analysis: In Retrospect..., Pressure Points: Ekika, Ashigatame
[F-5] Stage Two (Speed 10, Tactics 6, Stamina 4)
- Regular Techniques: Vital Strike: Niban, Battle Analysis: Do-Over!, Pressure Points: Gekitsuu, Kutsuu
[F-6] Stage Three (Speed 12, Tactics 8, Stamina 8)
- Regular Techniques: Vital Strike: Sanban, Battle Analysis: Who goes there?, Pressure Point: Kokoronimonai
[TP] – Special Technique: Mirage of Foresight
[TP] Stage Four (15 Speed, 14 Stamina, 14 Strength, 14 Tactics)
- Regular Techniques: Vital Strike: Shiban, Battle Analysis: I Choose You!, Pressure Point: Mukankaku
|Cumulative Bonuses: +16 Speed, +20 Stamina|

Kusagakure Ninjutsu
[F-7] Etai Souken (Power 2, Tactics 2) [Stage One]
[GMAP] Kusa Bunshin (Control 3, Intelligence 2) [Stage One]
[F-8] Hinsei no Senrigan (Intelligence 6, Tactics 5, Control 5) [Stage Two]
[AP] Gosunkugi Kusa Tama (Intelligence 5, Tactics 4, Willpower 4) [Stage Two]
[TP] Kusa Kusariei (Intellegence 8, Willpower 8, Tactics 6) [Stage Three]
[TP] Tsukene Yari (Power 8, Control 8, Reserves 6) [Stage Three]
[AP] Kusa Hayashi Hara (Intelligence 12, Tactics 11, Willpower 10, Power 12) [Stage Four]
[TP] Kusa Mikon (Intelligence 17, Tactics 16, Willpower 16, Power 15) [Stage Five]

Kusagakure Genjutsu
[GMAP] Tanpopo Kaze (Power 2, Tactics 2) [Stage One]
[F-9] Hana no Jutsu (Control 3, Intellegence 2) [Stage One]
[F-10] Ki Bunshin no Jutsu (Power 4, Control 4) [Stage One]
[F-11] Etai Teichi no Jutsu (Power 5, Control 4, Reserves 4) [Stage Two]
[F-12] Genjutsu Kai (Willpower 8, Tactics 8, Intellegence 6) [Stage Three]
[AP] Kamigami Riki no Jutsu (Intelligence 12, Tactics 11, Willpower 10, Power 12) [Stage Four]

Kusagakure no Kuchiyose: Neko
[AP] Kuchiyose no Hyougomii (Strength 3, Tactics 2) [Stage One]
[TP] Kuchiyose no Hyouyuu (Strength 6, Speed 6, Willpower 4) [Stage Two]
[TP] Kuchiyose no Hyoubuke (Strength 9, Speed 9, Willpower 7) [Stage Three]
[TP] Kuchiyose no Hyoukuro (Strength 14, Speed 13, Stamina 11, Intelligence 10) [Stage Four]

Name: Shinobi Kit
Cost: 0

Total: 0
Weapon Points Remaining: 8
Additional Weapon Points Gained: 0

Biography: It was seventeen years ago that I was born. My birth was nothing too special, just another product of a pair of people that felt the need to have a kid together. Completely ignoring the fact that we live in a village of deadly ninja where death could claim you at any time, they wanted to raise me in a good place. I'd say they did a damn good job of it, too. My parents...dunno' if you've heard of them or not, but their names are Kiyomizu Ryushi and Sayoko, respectively. Good people, I'd tell you. Well, not all the time... However, that's to be expected right? No one's good all the time. But, I tell you what. You don't wanna' cross my mother though. She has a nasty streak if you mess with her too much. Never mind that she stopped her shinobi training after Chuunin rank, that woman can go batshit.

Now, the old man... Oh right, that's my name for my father Ryushi. He doesn't like it much I know, but he's had to get used to it. Heh. Well, he's really nothing worth mentioning. Not even a ninja. I wonder how in the hell he and my mother had paired up. Not saying that I dislike the old man or anything. It's just hard to imagine how a kunoichi could fall in love with a normal man. But, whatever. Guess that’s another thing about my mom I don’t know about.

I have three younger siblings, all brats. Nijika, Atsui, and Nagato are their names. Niji is fifteen years old and people say that she and I look very much alike. I personally wouldn't say that, but whatever. She's really cool, too. I try to talk to her when I'm not too busy. She decided not to attend the Shinobi academy though; she loves her books, that girl. That’s why she decided to work at the library instead. Atsui and Nagato just happen to be twins. They're also eleven-years-old and they're bad as hell. Oh man, you should see the type of shit that they get into. You wouldn't believe! But, yeah. They're not identical twins though. Nagato got our dad's looks while the rest of us got moms. So, instead of the brown hair and green eyes that we have, his hair is brown and he has this murky grey color to his eyes. It's so weird when he gets mad. It's like they swirl around like clouds from a thunderstorm.

But enough about them. This Bio is about me. As I said before, I was born on May 22nd. That would make me a Gemini as well. On that same note, did you know that there are certain personality traits are said to come with certain signs? Well, that's what Ma' said to me before. Supposedly, we—and by we, I mean Gemini are very "airy" people. Like, we're restless and full of energy...or something like that. Very intellectual and full of questions and the like. That we don't like the mundane and repetitive things in our world. Hell, I'd say astrologists nailed that about right. She also told me that when I was younger, all I would do was ask questions. 'Why does that do that?' 'Who is that?' 'What happened to that?’ It used to drive them nuts. Oh, and they said I used to wander alot. Without any real place in mind, I would just walk off somewhere. I think it was just to escape how boring things were.

Lemme tell you a story that my parents told me. Well, apparently I was like six-years-old right? ...and my parents had taken me and Nijika around with them when they went out shopping with some friends and stuff. Well, it turns out that I had slipped off without them knowing. But, seriously... How could you have missed the warmth of a human hand switched with the fuzziness of a stuffed bunny? That was just inattentiveness on their part.

Moving on... Well, they eventually found that I was not with them and that I'd slipped away. I really don't remember it that well... I mean, I was six and all. But, somehow I had made it from the village's shopping district all the way over to the Wine Goddess' shrine temple and was "rescued" by a kunoichi that had happened to pass by. To wrap up the story neatly, she brought me back to my parents and we eventually became friends with the woman. The details of what happened on the way back to my parents are hazy, but I do remember flying through the air. I loved that feeling... Shoot, I think that feeling kinda' jumpstarted my drive to become a shinobi.

For the next few years, things had been pretty much the same. I was running around and getting into stuff and all that. I was still asking all kind of questions to just about anyone that I could find to answer me. You know. Same ol', same ol'. Well, until I was about ten.

Ah, that's when shit hit the fan. Well, figuratively of course. When I was ten, I told my mom that I wanted to be enrolled in the Shinobi Academy. I think she fainted as soon as I told her, too. Seriously, it wasn't that big of a deal. I mean, sure. I usually didn't finish what I started...but I really wanted to do this! You can't fault me for that. For the next few weeks Ma' and Pop tried so hard to change my mind about it. I told 'em every time. "I wanna' be a shinobi." Eventually, they caved and let me go. So, after a few more weeks (Had to wait for the new term to start). I was formally enrolled in Kusa's Shinobi Academy. I liked it at first, I really did. It was fun and the teachers were very informative when I asked them stuff. It was pretty hard, though having Ma' as a former Shinobi did help me a bit.

Then something changed. I honestly don't know what it was, really. After my uncle and aunt died on missions and my grandfather died, the atmosphere just kind of changed. My parents seemed to be irritated all the time. They would snap at me almost every time that I asked the something and they were pretty mean otherwise too. It didn't help that my peers didn't really like me much either. They thought I was stupid because I asked so many questions and I got mediocre grades. The material just wasn't interesting anymore. So, I just asked questions just to pass time.

That all stopped the next year, though. I just got tired of dealing with all the backlash of my questioning. I had just wanted to know what was going on. In any case, I just stopped asking questions. I'd silently absorb what people were saying and just process it on my own. I’d analyze it while on the outside keeping a mask of indifference and boredom. This was covered by my natural laziness. Heh. It wasn't worth the trouble of getting bitched at for asking a simple question anymore. So, I just mellowed out. I didn't let stuff bother me as much on the outside. Didn't ask too many questions about how everything worked all the time. I did find a sort of purpose though. I found that I love messing with people's minds. I don't exactly mean it like that, though. I found that I was very interested in how people thought as well as how things determined how they acted. Psychology is very interesting, you know. It's kinda' fun to pick out things that people do and use it against them. Though, it's best if you can have them act naturally. Makes it easier.

Oh! I did find that I had an affinity for genjutsu, too. I liked the premise of that. Not only can I determine what a person is thinking, feeling, seeing, or acting, I can also manipulate it. That's pretty damn cool. Throw a taijutsu style that literally allows me to pick apart my foe bit by bit and you have one hell of a combination! It doesn’t even take too much of an effort either. Though, there are problems with dealing with shinobi “tanks”… or people that are faster than I am. After breezing past that Genin graduation test, I was assigned to at team. Now, going against normal protocol we had one male and two females on the team instead of the opposite. Yeah, and a female Jounin instructor. You could almost smell the estrogen, I mean damn. You ever been on a team with them all having periods at the same time?

All jokes aside, they were cool. The two kunoichi were cool. Names were Nagasaki Mayoko and Tsukimiya Haruka with the Jounin's name being Tamayaki Ritsuka. Haruka was an advanced ninjutsu user. She was great with her Mokuton jutsu, while Mayuki's speed was just demonic with her sword. I forgot what kind of technique it was now...uh the Sleeping Blue Dragon Iajutsu, I think it was...

Now our Jounin on the other hand, oh man. She was just kick-assery in the purest form. I made the mistake of thinking that she wasn't that strong when we all sparred with her the first time. She pounded my ass into the dirt so hard, I'm still not sure that all of the bruises and stuff are gone. She didn't even use Ninjutsu either. Just whooped all of our asses with pure Taijutsu. We were no match at all...until we (I) learned to work together. Then it got a bit better.

Over the next few years, we would complete our fair share of missions. I'd say we had one of the best completion percentages that Kusagakure has ever seen, though that may be an over exaggeration on my part. We passed the Chuunin exam our first time, too. But, Haruka got poisoned pretty bad during the second stage by a Suna-nin. It took quite a while to get her back up to fighting condition, so I'm surprised that we all made it. I heard that usually doesn't happen, but then again I'm not surprised since there were a record number of Chuunin that were named that day. It was probably a fluke that we made it.

Since then, the four of us have split. Ritsuka-sensei took another batch of genin students. Mayoko went on to become private tutor for her sword style and I think I heard that Haruka fell in love, then got pregnant by a fellow Chuunin and had to go off-duty for a while. As for me, I'm just doing the same stuff. Taking missions for Kusagakure and trying to better my skills.

…Nothing too special.

But now, I feel like I’ve gained a new awareness of things…being on top missions, carrying out assassinations, meeting and interacting with many types of people and everything else that is going on in the village has made me a little unsure about what I’m supposed to be doing. Hopefully I’ll find some sort of stability in my life soon…

Other Info: - Shusui likes to cook.
- He loves to read.
- Favorite color is Green.
- Astute in multi-tasking.
- Has an ability to intake information, without having to actively listen to it.
- Has an extremely mischievous streak.
- Likes to flirt.
- Born May 22nd.

Thread Log:
- GMAP 04/28/08: Kusa Bunshin
- Basic Patrol? How Boring 04/29/08: +1 Control, +1 Reserves, Kusa Kusariei
- Breakout: Old Dogs and Old Tricks 06/01/08: +1 Strength, Mirage of Foresight
- GMAP 06/11/08: Tanpopo Kaze
- Just In Case 07/13/08: +1 Power, Tsukene Yari
- Revision of Relations 10/10/08: +1 Power, Fukuwajutsu
- 2 AP 12/14/08: +2 Power
- 3 AP 03/19/09: Kuchiyose no Hyougomii, Kamigami Riki no Jutsu, Gosunkugi Kusa Tama
- 10 AP 03/26/09: +3 Intelligence, Tactics, Willpower and Kusa Hayashi Hara
- Old Rival 05/03/09: Ineligible for rating (Two threads at once.)
- Stop that Mask 06/03/09: +2 Strength and Kusa no Kuchiyose: Hyouyuu
- On the lam 06/20/09: +1 Strength, Kafunkyuuka Shibuku
- Of Constancy and Change 10/24/09: +2 Intelligence, Kuchiyose no Hyoubuke
- Old Attire, New Decor 08/18/10: +2 Power, +1 Tactics
- Strongarm Tactics 09/16/10: +1 Power (AP), +1 Willpower, Eki Haitori no Jutsu
- Foreign Drank 05/30/11: +1 Strength, Kusa Mikon

- Addition 05/20/12: +1 Speed (AP), +2 Strength (AP)
- The Butcher's House - Part One 05/24/12: +1 Stamina, Kuchiyose no Hyoukuro
- What's up Doc? 01/21/13: +1 Control, Ahou no Ojike Stage Four
- Wrong Number 07/10/15: +2 Speed

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[Kumogakure] Matsuoka Imae [Konohagakure] Ohayashi Toshiko
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Old 01-22-2008, 04:28 PM   #2
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Genjutsu Specialist
Special: When taken as Primary Archetype, the character recieves an extra 1 post added to base duration to one genjutsu technique. This may be used only once a thread.
Primary: Mental
Secondary: Chakra
Tertiary: Physical

Stat blocks are incorrect. You can't take Physical as Secondary.
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Old 01-22-2008, 04:43 PM   #3
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That mix-up has now been corrected and edited.

[Kirigakure] Imai Hayate [Kusagakure] Kiyomizu Shusui
[Kumogakure] Matsuoka Imae [Konohagakure] Ohayashi Toshiko
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Old 01-22-2008, 06:11 PM   #4
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Can you please just list the names of your regular techs instead of pasting their ENTIRE description?
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To JauntyHat: I just went in a fixed it, though that was how I was used to putting stuff in my taijutsu section. o_o; Sorry.

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Old 01-23-2008, 02:21 PM   #6
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Strength: 1 +7(Base) -1(QS) = 9
Should be 7.

The second paragraph of your biography reads like it would fit better in personality.In general, the bio's a bit bland.
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I fixed that other stat error and for the biography, I thought it was just a bit lacking. Do you figure I should elaborate on it more or is it not that big of a deal?
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If you're able to come up with a way to improve the story, then there's no harm in doing so. In fact, it'll probably help.
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Indeed, Aces is correct that the aim here should be to write a biography in the biography section. Right now you have more personality and then the last paragraph is a biography.

You need to flesh out the man's history, give him some events to remember and live by. Read other profiles for examples.
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Alright! Overhauled the last bio and threw in another, much longer biography. Added in a bit more to the personality part as well.

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