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Old 04-15-2014, 05:34 PM   #1
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Omura Etsuji
"NADARE"


Alias: Nadare (Avalanche)
Age: 24
Sex: Male
Height: 5'11"

Character Type: Nukenin
Country/Village: Yuki no Kuni / Yukigakure no Sato
Rank: Officially Chuunin; Jounin-Level
Division: Refugee

Physical Description:

Ashen. Pallid. Both a living manifestation of his natural element and a product of his environment, the man's body is honed and bears sharp features including a rigid jawline, angular eyes and a pointed chin.

His hair is thin, a jaggedly cropped cut the color of freshly fallen snow which reflects hues of pinks and yellows when exposed to the sun. Accented by long lashes, his eyes are a deep turquoise. Despite their attractive color, however, they do little else but reflect a certain uncomfortable degree of pain and malice, plagued by both visions of what was and revelations of events that have not yet come to pass.

Clothing:

Utilitarian and sparse, the man's rarely changes from the outfit he wore upon his exodus from Yukigakure. His training as a former snow shinobi have provided him the means to steel himself against the harsh climates of the world, but still benefits from an insulated, hooded vest of pure white, trimmed with black, and lined with crimson fabric. The vest itself is reversible, though it is a rare occasion to see the man in red. His pants are gray-blue hakama, loosely tied and tucked to offer freedom of movement. He wears close-toed black shinobi sandals with gray leggings that assist in ankle support bound by a set of black leather belts and their gleaming silver clasps.

Around his mid-section he wears a dull gray compress which straightens his back. Above this, a black obi with trailing ends that dangle from the knot and reach down below his knees. Several pouches and holsters find their place strung across said belt. Below his vest, he wears a chain mesh shirt disguised as the same fabric of the wrap around his waist. His fingerless sleeves are comprised of the same fabric. Finally, the man is virtually never without a form-fitting face mask, removing it only to eat or drink.

Personality:

Bitter. Cold. A hard young man with a frozen heart, driven by natural (and sometimes supernatural) survival instincts. After Snowfall, he shed his family and given names in favor of a pseudonym which ultimately defines his personality both in and out of combat. Much like an avalanche, he indiscriminately falls on his oft-unsuspecting victims with startling speed and strength, seeking to end both conflicts and conversations alike as efficiently and utterly as possible.

That said, the man is very much a lone wolf, typically preferring to operate without the company of others. Years of isolation working for hire in the lands far to the north of his previous home have, in a way, stolen his voice; where he was once thoughtfully outspoken and his tone both concerned and warm, he has regressed into something almost inhuman... a raspy snarl, incisive and frigid as the ice which he conjures as easily as breathing.

Nadare is as vindictive as he is merciless, and seldom leaves survivors.

Nindo; "...Shatter."

Combo Archetype: Harbinger
Tactician - Cavalier
Combo Special: Cannot be caught off guard/ambushed once per thread
Stat Merits: +2 to Tactics, +1 to Intelligence, +2 Speed, +1 Power
Stat Flaws: -2 to Strength, -1 to Power, -2 Intelligence, -1 Reserves

Primary: Mental
Secondary: Chakra
Tertiary: Physical

Intelligence: 1 + 1 - 2 + 21 = 21
Tactics: 1 + 2 + 18 = 21
Willpower: 1 + 21 +1[TP] = 23

Control: 1 + 16 + 2[TP] = 19
Power: 1 - 1 + 1 + 16 + 3 [TP] = 20
Reserves: 1 - 1 + 18 + 3 [TP] = 21

Strength: 1 - 2 + 11 = 10 [+15 SnH = 25] [Level Five]
Speed: 1 + 2 + 17 = 20 [+12 SnH = 32] [Level Six]
Stamina: 1 + 12 = 13 [Level Three]

GLOBAL NINJUTSU [S5]

(F1) Kawarimi no Jutsu (Body Switch Technique) (S1)
Requirements: Power 2, Tactics 2
(F2) Henge no Jutsu (Transformation Technique) (S1)
Requirements: Control 3, Intelligence 2
(F3) Kinobori/Kabenobori no Jutsu (Tree Walking / Wall Walking Technique) (S2)
Requirements: Power 5, Control 4, Reserves 4
(AP) Genjutsu Kai (Release) (S3)
Requirements: Intelligence 10, Tactics 10, Control 8
(AP) Tenkuu Hokou no Gyou (The Art of Walking on Air) (S4)
Requirements: Power 15, Control 15, Reserves 13, Intelligence 14
(AP) Chidori (Thousand Birds) (S5)
Requirements: Intelligence 18, Tactics 17, Willpower 17, Control 14

ICE NINJUTSU [S6]

(F4) Hyouton: Shogai Ni Hanshite Kanbo (Ice Element: Ward Against Cold) (S1)
Requirements: 3 Willpower, 3 Control
(TP) Hyouton: Nozoku (Ice Element: Spyglass) (S2)
Requirements: 5 Willpower, 4 Intelligence, 4 Tactics

(F5) Hyouton: Reinigiri (Ice Element: Zero Grip) (S2)
Requirements: 6 Reserves, 6 Power, 4 Willpower
(F6) Hyouton: Tsubetai Ashikase (Ice Element: Freezing Trap) (S3)
Requirements: 8 Willpower, 6 Intelligence, 8 Tactics
(F7) Hyouton: Hitoshirezu Yari (Ice Element: Hidden Spear) (S3)
Requirements: 9 Reserves, 9 Power, 7 Willpower
(F8) Hyouton: Yuki Shunshin (Ice Element: Snow Instantaneous Body) (S4)
Requirements: 12 Reserves, 11 Power, 10 Control, 12 Willpower
(F9) Hyouton: Ooi no Hakujou Kanchuu (Ice Element: Cruel Winter’s Mantle) (S4)
Requirements: 12 Willpower, 11 Intelligence, 10 Tactics, 12 Reserves
(F10) Hyouton: Fuusetsu (Ice Element: Snowstorm) (S4)
Requirements: 14 Reserves, 13 Power, 11 Control, 10 Intelligence
(F11) Hyouton: Samu Hagane (Ice Element: Cold Steel) (S5)
Requirements: 17 Reserves, 16 Power, 16 Control, 15 Willpower
(F12) Hyouton: Wareru (Ice Element: Shatter) (S6)
Requirements: 21 Willpower, 20 Intelligence, 19 Tactics, 17 Reserves, 15 Power
(TP) Hyouton: Nomu Kyuutai (Ice Element: Engulfing Sphere) (S6)
Requirements: 21 Reserves, 20 Power, 19 Control, 17 Willpower, 15 Intelligence


HAND TO HAND TAIJUTSU - SATSUI NO HADOU [S3]

(F13-14) Stage One (+5 Strength, +4 Speed)
Requirements: Speed: 5, Strength 3
(F15-16) Stage Two (+5 Strength, +4 Speed)
Requirements: Speed 8, Strength 6, Willpower 6
(F17-18) Stage Three (+5 Strength, +4 Speed)
Requirements: Speed 12, Strength 8, Willpower 8

Inventory:

Shinobi Kit (X)
Insulated Chain Mesh Sleeves (2)
-Arm Guards (1)
-Hidden (1)
Insulated Chain Mesh Undershirt (3)
-Body Armor (2)
-Hidden (1)
Weapon Points Remaining: 3
Additional Weapon Points Gained: 0





Some say this world will end in fire,
Some say in ice.
From what I've tasted of desire,
I hold with those who favor fire.
But if it had to perish twice,
I think I know enough of hate
To say that for destruction ice
Is also great
And would suffice.

After a formal audience with the Yukisen was denied, his plea for his family to heed his warning scoffed at and his attempt to rally colleagues to his side brushed off as no more than the desperate ravings of a mad-man, Omura Etsuji made the choice to leave his past life behind him. This amounted to, as one would guess, forsaking his allegiance to the Hidden Snow.

In the dead of night roughly two years before the terrible events of Yukigakure's destruction, the then promising Chuunin gathered what little equipment that he could, made for the restricted sections of the learning annex within the academy which housed many of the village's prized secrets and had time to secure a single Hyouton scroll before being happened upon by his elder brother, a ninja in service to the Yukisen himself.

In an escalation, Omura Etsuji tore his hitai-ate from his forehead and cast it at the feet of his brother, proclaiming that he wanted no involvement with a village which could not abide his talents nor listen to reason which he, in earnest, believed to be fact.

Doom was coming, for all of them. Visions of fighting men eaten alive, innocent women disintegrated and helpless infants, buried in snow.

For as long as he could remember, Omura Etsuji had the benefit of a rare gift seldom seen in the shinobi world. In short, he could see things before they happened, and this anomaly had proven itself extremely benefitial as a tool at a ninja's disposal. To know, now, that his brother lacked faith in his claims was, at the very least, heartbreaking. After all, hadn't his brother been the one to first recognize his uncanny talent in the first place? Wasn't he the one who convinced him to join the academy?

Unable to settle their differences, Etsuji was forced to fight the very brother who had raised and trained him as a shinobi since his earliest days. Unfortunately for his brother and the two other Chuunin who accompanied him, Etsuji's instincts alerted him to the ambush.

He won.

Quote:
Originally Posted by Etsuji's Shinobi Career
Second son to an upper middle class family, Etsuji grew up in the shadow of his elder brother. The first born and otherwise prodigal son was a shinobi, often regailed as a brilliant strategist and famous for his skill in rigging complicated traps and organizing tremendously effective ambushes at a young age.

The eldest was certainly loving and affectionate towards his baby brother, and even in the latter's earliest days, the eldest would often remark that his sibling seemed to know whenever he was approaching, especially when his intention was to surprise the infant with his presence. This behavior continued as the boys grew in age; the elder setting up devices of cruel design with the intent of testing the younger's uncanny senses. Foiled at every turn, it became clear that Etsuji possessed a natural ability that would be, in his opinion, best suited for the same line of work that he himself took pride in.

And so, upon recommendation of his elder brother and despite protest from his parents, Etsuji enrolled in Yukigakure's academy. He flourished. His teachers would eventually note that the boy possessed a great mind and thus made many an attempt to push him towards learning the finer arts of Genjutsu, which Etsuji declined in favor of pursuing a more Ninjutsu oriented career path.

Graduating with honors at the age of eleven, the boy was promoted to a fully-fledged Genin and assigned to a team which would later go on to achieve a 94% success rating, due, in part, to Etsuji's cunning and now finely attuned senses. Many an enemy's plans were revealed and traps ruined, but more importantly, many an ally's lives were saved as a direct result of Etsuji's involvement in missions.

For five years loyal service and citing the capture of a dangerous domestic terrorist (who's modus operandi involved hijacking zeppelins and rigging them to self-destruct mid flight before safely parachuting away) as his highest achievment, Etsuji was promoted to Chuunin at the age of sixteen.
Clasping his hands together in a seal, the now nukenin transported himself as far from the scene as he possibly could, tears freezing to his face as he silently streaked through the sprawling metropolis. The commotion in the shinobi undercity had the village's sentries on high alert, and despite the clamor and calls for his return, he never looked back. Fearing his former government would assign him an entry in the infamous bingo book, the runaway headed north.

In Kita, the north-most city within Snow Country, Etsuji found passage on a large whaling ship. Unsure of where to go from here, he determined that living aboard the ship and working as a deck hand was the best available option and would serve as a source of food and shelter until a more desirable opportunity would present itself. For a year and a half, such an opportunity never knocked on the door to his cabin. Thus, below decks, the ex-Chuunin found ample time to practice both his skills, further increasing his prowess. In the deepest reaches of his being, he knew that a time would come where he would be able to return to the land of his birth... and he knew he'd need to be ready.

Then, far to the south, Yukigakure was destroyed in a catastrophic event that the small folk who brokered deals with the ship for its cargo called "Snowfall." When news of this reached Etsuji's ears he was overcome with emotion, ranging from regret to indescribable rage. He was right, after all that time.

They should have listened.

The next instance that the ship returned to Kita's port, Etsuji abandoned the ship after unloading its cargo. Foreign looking officials inquired as to his name, to which he replied, "Nadare."

He sought out witnesses of the event where he could, and drew blanks. At most, he learned of a short lived war against Konoha during which the Yukisen ordered all shinobi to retreat. This action proved fatal for every man and woman that heeded their master's call, and without its own forces to defend their lands, Konoha now occupied much of the survivable lands of Snow Country.

Unsure of just who to blame for the atrocities committed, Nadare sought both solitude and refuge in the mountains, coming down into the passes and forests to hunt for game... and, where possible... enact his vengeance upon the invaders of his country. Sound shinobi, Cloud shinobi, Samurai from Iron, and especially Leaf shinobi were his targets, using parties of scavengers and surveyors as little more than target practice. With skill comparable to that of a Jounin, Nadare fell on his enemies and took great pleasure in ridding his home of their filth.

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I Paid the Iron Price
Poem before the biography is Robert Frost's "Fire and Ice."

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Originally Posted by Bingo Book Entry

Name: Omura Etsuji
Shinobi Rank: Chuunin
Missing-nin Rank: B
Shinobi Village: Former Snow
Last Location: Possibly seen re-entering the areas around former Hidden Snow.
Additional Notes: A chuunin-ranked Snow shinobi, Etsuji murdered several shinobi in his escape. A master of traps, he is known as difficult to capture. The defeat of Hidden Snow has escalated the priority in capturing this shinobi.
Reward: Wanted dead or alive. Collect all rewards with Hidden Leaf, Hidden Cloud, or in the City of Kings.
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10/06/15 Runaway +2 Power, +Hyouton: Nozoku
02/11/16 Real Estate +2 Control, +1 Willpower, & Hyouton: Nomu Kyuutai (Ice Element: Engulfing Sphere)
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Old 04-15-2014, 06:14 PM   #2
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Ashen. Pallid. Both a living manifestation of his natural element and a product of his environment, the man's body is honed and bears sharp features including a rigid jawline, angular eyes and a pointed chin.
His hair is thin, a jaggedly cropped cut the color of freshly fallen snow which reflects hues of pinks and yellows when exposed to the sun. Accented by long lashes, his eyes are a deep turquoise. Despite their attractive color, however, they do little else but reflect a certain uncomfortable degree of pain and malice, plagued by both visions of what was and revelations of events that have not yet come to pass.
Line break between these paragraphs please.

Okay, now on to the biography. Usually in bios we like to see how a character gained ranks. What they did to deserve it, how they earned the experience they needed to do it. You skipped straight to Chuunin, so we don't know how he became a Chuunin, and I suppose he reached jounin level by serving as a deck hand on a whaling ship.

Those are the main problems. I talked to some people about magical foresight, and they don't seem to have an issue with it if it's just fluff . . . But I would talk to merdle about it, since that's time eye clan's thing as well.
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1) done

2) I will work on some additions to that to expand upon his actual career

3) It's mainly fluff, with his archetype Harbinger as an excuse. In-RP this ability would be limited to execution of the archetype special and nothing more.

Edit: Added necessary insight into his past (no more poof here, no sir)

Edit 2 @ Junge: The training beneath decks refers more to his taijutsu crap. Between his promotion to chuunin and 16 and his exit from the village five years later I'd imagine he was approaching Jounin level already. Edited out the word ninjutsu and changed it up so it's more ambiguous. Also he's mental primary lel

Edit 3 @ DB: I took it away, just for you. <3
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Old 04-15-2014, 08:10 PM   #4
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What is it with your characters and long eyelashes, anyway?

Stats check out, promotions aren't terribly poofy I suppose (though I kind of question how a chakra primary shinobi practiced high level jounin techniques on a whaling boat, 'below decks' or not). The harbinger thing doesn't bother me much since it's obviously just fluff for the special.

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Wonder what it would be like if our Snow nin met. And also I CANNOT BELIEVE you used one of the Eva's themes. GET OUT OF HERE.

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I like the use of Harbringer, personally.

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I've no problem with his ability to see the fall of snow coming. Add his bingo book entry.

Name: Omura Etsuji
Shinobi Rank: Chuunin
Missing-nin Rank: B
Shinobi Village: Former Snow
Last Location: Possibly seen re-entering the areas around former Hidden Snow.
Additional Notes: A chuunin-ranked Snow shinobi, Etsuji murdered several shinobi in his escape. A master of traps, he is known as difficult to capture. The defeat of Hidden Snow has escalated the priority in capturing this shinobi.
Reward: Wanted dead or alive. Collect all rewards with Hidden Leaf, Hidden Cloud, or in the City of Kings.

Everything else checks out, so it has my Approval.

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