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![]() ![]() ARECHIHANA SASORI Only way is up... ![]() [Title] Telescope of Dawn [Age] 12 [Sex] Male [Height] 5 feet, 3 inches [Character Type] Shinobi [Country/Village] Kaze no Kuni / Sunagakure no Sato [Rank] [Advanced] Genin [Division] [KAZE] [Clan/Bloodline Arechihana/Hyakunen no Hana [Nindo; "Way of the Ninja"] "I can't change yesterday, but I can write the future." [Description] A bit tall for his age—though, not Takai tall—Sasori is well on his way to growing up. His cinnamon skin is wrapped around a body with budding lean muscle, particularly noticeable in his bared arms. The Arechihana’s eyes are the same as any of his kin, warm sunbursts of red to yellow, though the face they are set in is more angular than typical of his kin, owing to his mother’s side. His hair is long and dark, worn as dreadlocks and typically gathered at the back of the crown to help keep it in control, a vivid cloth of purple with yellow serving as the tie. Among the clan grounds, you will find the genin dressed in the typical loose, airy attire associated with the clan’s members, all billowing linens intricately wrapped and draped—and rarely with shoes beyond the scantest of leather sandals. Since his graduation as part of Spartoi, however, Sasori has taken to heart the uniform they are expected to wear, seeking to find ways to make it his own without stepping too far outside the regulations. Given his bloodline, however, some modifications were unavoidable. As much bulk as he could get away with had to be eliminated to maintain range of motion, therefore the arms of the maroon jacket have been removed, the golden trim modified to fit with the sleeveless motif. He even wears the crimson sandals, though his are thinner and lighter, leaving more of the skin of his foot exposed to allow more flexible use of the Hyakunen no Hana, though it is not uncommon for him to take them off before a fight. The dark brown pants of his uniform certainly fit the bill of ‘loose fitting’ about his legs, though they are cuffed tightly near the calf, creating a dramatic, billowing look, cinched as they are at the waist with a crimson and gold sash presented by the Seven Elders as a token of recognition of his graduation, the sash having the story of Mother Desert and Father Sky penned across it. The cape is standard issue on the outside, though the inside is covered by colorful geometric illustrations in vivid purples, oranges, blues, reds, and yellows. along his waist, many plain, unassuming pouches have been secured to the sash to carry the tools of the shinobi trade. [Personality] **Feel like I got a lot of people that's depending on me, Built a solid foundation, put the building on me Sasori was always a willful child. Mind you, not in the bratty, “scream-until-I-get-what-I-want” way; no, it was disciplined, always disciplined. He has always been a little more mature for his age than his peers in that way. His willfulness is not entitlement, but determination. His fire is not a quickly exhausted inferno, but a steady, constant flame. When it swells, it is always in its confines, the genin ever mindful of the lines even when his passions flare. Aimlessness is something unknown for the goal-oriented and purpose-driven youth. This discipline and determination were only tempered with the recent troubles brought on by his infamous uncle, Hokori Taka. As the world turned against his mother’s family, the boy found himself in a situation that would be too easily forgiven for petulance and bitterness. It is a testament to his character that, where the world around him expected negative, Sasori kept his head, kept himself, and put everything on his shoulders. Now, he is as much the good-natured boy he was before, but with a man’s weight upon his shoulders, setting his goal in life to set things right for his siblings, for his mother, and, lastly, for himself. As is common for the Arechihana, Sasori is a seeker of friends. Raised with the teaching that all of Sunagakure is as good as family, Sasori is eager to reach out and inquire, driven by curiosity as to how other’s view the world and what the path they walk is like. Moreover, he has a particular affinity to the outliers—the outcasts and misfits of the world. Anyone who does not quite fit the mold, the genin is fascinated by, seeking them out to bring them close—in essence, taking the clan’s concept of The Embrace as a guidepost for daily life. For him, the exchange of the term ‘friend’ might as well mean ‘brother’ or ‘sister’ and he will not hesitate to go out on a limb for them. Beyond this, Sasori is yet many things. He is studious and well-read, particularly on histories and religious texts. He is clever and cunning, yet in a way that lacks malice. He is adventurous, but not reckless. And, more, he is changing, growing up more and faster as the years march on. Who knows where he will end up? What can be held fast, however, is that, no matter how the world changes around him, the fire in his gut will always be there, burning, driving him onward to whatever goal is before him. In time, it'll come Just stay focused and humble, my son Show and prove, prove you're the one It's not about who is dopest Who wants it the most So just go out and get it... Primary Archetype: Ocotillo Special:When taken as Primary Archetype, the character can use two special techniques of Hyakunen no Hana in the same post once per thread Secondary Archetype: Projectile Specialist Net Stat Merits: +1 Speed, Control, Reserves. Net Stat Flaws: -1 Intelligence, -2 Tactics. [Statistics] Primary(10+4 Advance Points+7 AP) Strength: 1 +3 +2 (AdvP) +1 (AP) = 7 (+8 AN) Speed: 1 +1 (Arch) +4 +1 (AdvP) +3 (AP) + 1 (TP) = 11 (+10 HnH) Stamina: 1 +3 +1 (AdvP) +3 (AP) = 8 (+6 AN) Secondary:(8+7 AP +2 AdvP) Power: 1 +2 +3 (AP) +2 (AdvP)= 8 Control: 1 +1 (Arch) +4 +2 (AP) = 8 Reserves: 1 +1 (Arch) +2 +2 (AP) = 6 Tertiary:(6+5 Advance Points+7 AP) Intelligence: 1 -1 +2 +2 (AP) + 2 (AdvP) = 6 Tactics: 1 -2 +2 +3 (AP) + 2 (AdvP) = 6 Willpower: 1 -1 +2 +2 (AP) +1 (AdvP) = 6 Jutsu: Hyakunen no Hana (6 jutsu) Stage One Req.: 4 Speed, 4 Stamina Hahen (Splinter) Req.: Control 2, Power 2 Sensaku Suru I (To Pry I) Req.: Control 2, Power 2 Stage Two Req.: Speed 8, Stamina 6, Control 6 Suna no Youkai (Specter of the Sands) Req.: Control 4, Power 4 Josho Hari (Rising Nail) Req.: Control 4, Power 4 Regular Techniques: -Nakkuru (Knuckles) -Iwa o Bunkatsu (Break the Rock) Cumulative Taijutsu Bonuses: (+10 Speed, +4 Stamina, +4 Strength) Forbidden Sloth (1 Jutsu, 1 AP) Stage One Req.: 4 Strength 4 Stamina Stage Two Req.: 7 Strength 7 Stamina 6 Tactics Cumulative Taijutsu Bonuses: (+8 Strength, +6 Stamina, +4 Speed) Sand Genjutsu (2 AP) Stage One Kazeoto Req.: 3 Willpower, 2 Control Stage Two Nigemizu Fukumen Req.: 6 Reserves, 5 Power, 5 Intelligence Global Ninjutsu (2 AP) Stage One: Kawarimi no Jutsu Req.: Power 2, Tactics 2 Stage Two: Kinobori/Kabenobori no Jutsu Req.: Power 5, Control 4, Reserves 4 Minor House Summons (2 GMAP, 1 AdvP) Stage One: Crests: Safety in Numbers Req.: Control 3, Intelligence 2 Stage Two: Swarms: Stinging Cloud Req.: Power 6, Control 6, Intelligence 4 Stage Three: Wings: Aerial Bombardment Req.: Power 8, Control 8, Reserves 6 [Inventory] -Shinobi Kit [0] -Hallucinogenic poison [3] Initial Weapon Points: 8 Weapon Points Purchased: 0 Weapon Points Used: 3 Remaining Weapon Points: 5 [Biography] Quote:
[Mission Log] The Language Of Flowers - +1 Speed
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"The more I see of what you call civilization, ||GM, Arechihana Bloodline Clan of Sand||the more highly I think of what you call savagery!" Robert E. Howard, King Kull ||Co-GM, Shoda Bloodline Clan of Cloud|| \\Shoda Hoshihana, Cloud Jounin// //Arechihana Sasori, Spartoi\\ ||Yotarou Ouji, SUNA chuunin||Koike Kano, ANBU|| ||Hasami Kuma, the Iron Devil of Sound||Tsubasa Kinoshita, Rain Jounin|| Jutsu||Items \\Taka// Last edited by Kaen; 04-10-2016 at 03:47 PM.. |
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Telescope of Dusk—Arechihana Sasori [Kyz]
To look or see / far seeing Biography clocks in at 1471—you lucky. Lol. Also, you made edits but I was all ready done reviewing your character, so…I ain’t change what I wrote, lmao. The finesse on the interview format is real, cutting out the questions and just having the answers was a rather smart move. This is the second Spartoi I read, and going through his biography solidified the reason why I opted for first person narratives opposed to anything else—I can tell how invested you were when writing this. I feel like this application transcends the Spartoi specifically because of his, and your, connection to Hokori Taka. That dynamic alone made this character strong, which in turn makes the potential between Sasori and Hiryo that much more powerful. Also, Sasori mentions that Taka killed Nayoko. This isn’t true. Shujou did, unless there is something I missed. The character is well written, clear and his family is hefty enough that this character as a whole is solid. My only real critique would be over the last few paragraphs, where you sort of just start listing Spartoi off and giving an opinion on them. Felt like that could’ve been woven earlier in the narrative. But that won’t stop me from giving this a Sand Primary GM Approval. That, and, you have no other competition for this title. I feel like that’s due in part with the community aspect of the Spartoi’s creation process, so, it’s all good. Arechihana Sasori is officially the Telescope of Dusk. Welcome to the Spartoi. Additional Notes Quote:
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Half'd after edits.
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Fixed the hanging tag.
The thing about 'Taka killing Nayoko' is intended to be that, due to his membership in the SR and their direct role in her death, he would be associated, particularly in the circumstances here. The Arechihana really adored Nayoko and, by association, they consider all the Sasori Ryodan to be equally guilty of her death. I'll be going through and doing some spelling edits I noticed this morning (Auntie Namik, for instance, unless my character is related to Piccolo).
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"The more I see of what you call civilization, ||GM, Arechihana Bloodline Clan of Sand||the more highly I think of what you call savagery!" Robert E. Howard, King Kull ||Co-GM, Shoda Bloodline Clan of Cloud|| \\Shoda Hoshihana, Cloud Jounin// //Arechihana Sasori, Spartoi\\ ||Yotarou Ouji, SUNA chuunin||Koike Kano, ANBU|| ||Hasami Kuma, the Iron Devil of Sound||Tsubasa Kinoshita, Rain Jounin|| Jutsu||Items \\Taka// |
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Half approved. You know, if Engi actually had dates and stuff, we wouldn't have to put "In the month of XX on the day of XXXX"! But hey, not like my immersion was broken or anything.
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