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Old 07-28-2017, 10:09 PM   #1
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Default Man Vs. Herself

man vs. himself.




Len Sosu and Arechihana Rika do into the desert to check up on a missing surveyor team only to be confronted by the bijuuko that expired their research. The team is forced to defend themselves and Rika learns a nifty little trick. Sosu, pushed to the sidelines somewhat, learns that he might have a new little rival in the up and coming genin.

featuring... Arechihana Rika & Len Sosu

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Old 07-28-2017, 10:16 PM   #2
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Well on my way to rating every RiRi thread ever. Claimed.
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Old 07-30-2017, 04:39 PM   #3
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First off, let's go ahead and get this out of the way. This thread was accomplished in a week, and it showed. There were grammar errors and such that I know for a fact neither of y'all [especially Cayuga in your recent form] would make if you weren't working at such breakneck speed. I get it tho, gotta get that MotM point, and I'd be a hypocrite if I said I wasn't doing that on an Eri thread as well. I'm pretty confident this is just an example of rushed work for the both of you, and not a new norm. It better not be !

Still, despite the rushed nature of the thread I do gotta commend you guys on still managing to showcase your characters well. Geisha, you already know my thoughts on Rika given that I apparently rate all of her threads. You continued to be stellar here, with her interactions with Momo in particular achieving maximum d'awwwness. Cayugs, you seem to have more of a handle with Sosu than you do with some of your other characters, communicating his goals and passions and tying the story into those. While attacking a bijuu is absolutely dumb, you gave an excellent reason for doing so. Even though you should've become cat food lol.

Also, excellent job with Momo, who if I'm not mistaken has become kind of your main dog that you bring out. I think that shows because you have her personality fleshed out rather well. Daiki, on the other hand, kind of fell flat. "WHAT THE HELL IS THAAAAAAAAIM DAIKI LETS FIGHT" wasn't exactly compelling.

All in all, for being a rushed thread it was solid enough work. Don't let this become the norm though, both of ya okay?

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Geisha: 2 Ponts + MotM +Bijuu XP [normal] + Bijuu XP [killing a Bijuu]
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Old 07-30-2017, 04:56 PM   #4
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As always your ratings are spot on, Masked! Thanks for the input!

+ 2 to Reserves

Bijuu EXP: 1 for thread and 1 for Bijuu Kill (Non-GM'd Kill)

Using the MotM for Bijuu Art: Magnet Release – CaoCao Carcass Code:

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[B]Stage Four:[/B*] Bijuu Art: Magnet Release – CaoCao Carcass [B][COLOR="DimGray"]://: 12 Control, 11 Power, 10 Reserves, 12 Intelligence[/COLOR*][/B*]


Add: Bijuu Claws under Bijuu Arts.

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Old 07-30-2017, 05:26 PM   #5
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Thanks masked; it get the rushing for sure....only wanted to get it through for the end of the month. No doubt appreciate the rating.


Can I get +2 stamina and with the extra point

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Stage 4:
Requirement: Stamina 21, Strength 18, Willpower 14, Speed 3
Stage Bonus:+5 Strength,+4 Stamina

Stage bonus should be +18 to stamina
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Old 07-30-2017, 05:37 PM   #6
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Done and moved
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